Before class
begins on Friday, write a topic-driven paragraph in which you identify Coach
Kirk's writing tips (the comments I've made on your Edmundson summary) and what
you need to do to improve. Submit it on Blogger.com.
In my summary of Mark Edmundson's "On The Uses of Liberal Education" I wrote hastily and therefore did not effectively meet the criteria for a good paragraph. My topic sentence was thorough to a fault, as was my final thought. I did not take advantage of the wonderful tools known to us as direct quotes or effective paraphrases. I made small, sloppy errors that a college student should know to avoid. I should have included the various aspects that are common to summaries, as well as principles of writing such as proofreading closely.
Katy Dyches Professor Kirk ENGL 3353 4 September 2015 Coach Kirk’s Comments: Edmundson Edition In my summary of Edmundson’s essay, “On the Uses of a Liberal Education”, I made a number of mistakes pertaining to both the format and content of the paragraph. The formatting of my paragraph did not meet MLA standards; I neglected to include a heading and I allowed the page to remain single-spaced. My topic sentence understated Edmundson’s critique of the educational system and the current college-age generation. I also failed to use sufficient textual references in the summary. I should have included more pertinent quotes.
Amanda McMahon Prof. Kirk ENGL 3353 3 September 2015 Edmundson Critique In my summary of Mark Edmundson’s article “On the Uses of Liberal Education,” I made mistakes pertaining to the format and content of my work. There was too much spacing in my header and I did not provide a title. I also failed to include the author of the article’s full name in my topic sentence. In order to improve I should use more quotes from the text in the future and paraphrase example from the text.
Sadie Wyant Professor Kirk ENGL 3353 3 September 2015 Coach Kirk's Critique of Edmundson In my summary of Mark Edmundson's article "On the Uses of a Liberal Education--As Lite Entertainment for Bored College Students," I made a few mistakes regarding the content and format. I neglected to include the author's first name when I introduced the article in the beginning of my paragraph. I also did not have my paragraph in correct MLA format--I forgot to make it double spaced. In general, I could have gone into a little more detail and expanded my observations more to improve my paragraph.
Kelsey Wheatle Professor Kirk English 3353 4 September 2015 Coach Kirk's Critique of Edmundson In my summary of Mark Edmundson's article "On the Uses of a Liberal Education", I neglected to use the correct MLA format. I also wrote more than the required paragraph. The first part of my paragraph was wrong because I included an introduction, which was not needed. I understand the errors of my work and I will work towards improving these errors. My first idea or topic sentence was the big flaw in my essay paragraph. The first idea, or topic sentence is supposed to be the controlling idea of the paragraph that identifies the author, identifies the tezt, and summarizes the content into a concise statement. Because I refused to have a controlling idea, the body of my paragraph was overflowing with ideas which were not condensed. The essay that I had written did not flow well together. I recognize the errors of my work. I also could have written more in depth about Edmundson's essay, and contributed some of my own thoughts and ideas into my summary, instead of only consulting Edmundson's ideas. I will improve on my MLA formatting, and creating a better topic sentence that will control my summary.
Ashton Dickerson Professor Kirk ENGL 3353 4 September 2015 Critique of Edmundson In my summary of Edmundson's essay, I did not adhere to proper MLA formatting. I need to double space all of my future assignments and also review punctuation rules. I also need to work on my topic sentence and make a statement rather than identify the main question the author addresses. In the future I will be sure to review MLA formatting and the punctuation rules. Additionally, I will work on writing topic sentences so that they are more specific and relate better to my entire paragraph.
In my summary of Mark Edmundson's "On The Uses of Liberal Education" I wrote hastily and therefore did not effectively meet the criteria for a good paragraph. My topic sentence was thorough to a fault, as was my final thought. I did not take advantage of the wonderful tools known to us as direct quotes or effective paraphrases. I made small, sloppy errors that a college student should know to avoid. I should have included the various aspects that are common to summaries, as well as principles of writing such as proofreading closely.
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ReplyDeleteProfessor Kirk
ENGL 3353
4 September 2015
Coach Kirk’s Comments: Edmundson Edition
In my summary of Edmundson’s essay, “On the Uses of a Liberal Education”, I made a number of mistakes pertaining to both the format and content of the paragraph. The formatting of my paragraph did not meet MLA standards; I neglected to include a heading and I allowed the page to remain single-spaced. My topic sentence understated Edmundson’s critique of the educational system and the current college-age generation. I also failed to use sufficient textual references in the summary. I should have included more pertinent quotes.
Amanda McMahon
ReplyDeleteProf. Kirk
ENGL 3353
3 September 2015
Edmundson Critique
In my summary of Mark Edmundson’s article “On the Uses of Liberal Education,” I made mistakes pertaining to the format and content of my work. There was too much spacing in my header and I did not provide a title. I also failed to include the author of the article’s full name in my topic sentence. In order to improve I should use more quotes from the text in the future and paraphrase example from the text.
Sadie Wyant
ReplyDeleteProfessor Kirk
ENGL 3353
3 September 2015
Coach Kirk's Critique of Edmundson
In my summary of Mark Edmundson's article "On the Uses of a Liberal Education--As Lite Entertainment for Bored College Students," I made a few mistakes regarding the content and format. I neglected to include the author's first name when I introduced the article in the beginning of my paragraph. I also did not have my paragraph in correct MLA format--I forgot to make it double spaced. In general, I could have gone into a little more detail and expanded my observations more to improve my paragraph.
Kelsey Wheatle
ReplyDeleteProfessor Kirk English 3353
4 September 2015
Coach Kirk's Critique of Edmundson
In my summary of Mark Edmundson's article "On the Uses of a Liberal Education", I neglected to use the correct MLA format. I also wrote more than the required paragraph. The first part of my paragraph was wrong because I included an introduction, which was not needed. I understand the errors of my work and I will work towards improving these errors. My first idea or topic sentence was the big flaw in my essay paragraph. The first idea, or topic sentence is supposed to be the controlling idea of the paragraph that identifies the author, identifies the tezt, and summarizes the content into a concise statement. Because I refused to have a controlling idea, the body of my paragraph was overflowing with ideas which were not condensed. The essay that I had written did not flow well together. I recognize the errors of my work. I also could have written more in depth about Edmundson's essay, and contributed some of my own thoughts and ideas into my summary, instead of only consulting Edmundson's ideas. I will improve on my MLA formatting, and creating a better topic sentence that will control my summary.
Callie Brothers
ReplyDeleteProf. Kirk
ENGL 3353
September 4, 2015
Kirks Critique:
If there is not a summary to critique on, then there is only one comment, "Get it done."
Ashton Dickerson
ReplyDeleteProfessor Kirk
ENGL 3353
4 September 2015
Critique of Edmundson
In my summary of Edmundson's essay, I did not adhere to proper MLA formatting. I need to double space all of my future assignments and also review punctuation rules. I also need to work on my topic sentence and make a statement rather than identify the main question the author addresses. In the future I will be sure to review MLA formatting and the punctuation rules. Additionally, I will work on writing topic sentences so that they are more specific and relate better to my entire paragraph.